My cat_550字

　　In my house,you can see a cat,and the cat is very beautiful.Now let me draw it for you.She has got white hair and tow big eyes.They are blue and bright.She has got four short legs.Her ears are small,and her tail is long.I finish it now.How lovely!                                                                                                       After school,I play with her at first,and she is my best friend.I like her very much!                                   Oh.Do you want to know her name?I'd like to tell you,and her name is"mimi".

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In my house, you can see a cat which is very beautiful. Now let me draw it for you. She has got white hair and two big eyes. They are blue and bright. She has got four short legs. Her ears are small and her tail is long. I finish it now. How lovely! After school, I often play with her, and she is my best friend. I like her very much! Do you want to know her name? I'd like to tell you, and her name is "Mimi". 

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    六年级:邵婧